UPDATING readability

[Matthias Andree]

David Syphers <dsyphers at u.washington.edu> writes:

> Okay... this would be grammatically correct. However, I'm curious why the 
> original poster believes the current version to be unclear, since it is also 
> grammatically correct. (Omitting "that" or "which" at the beginning of a 
> restrictive relative clause is very common in English.)

Yes, but this is pretty special to English; I know three other languages
and English is the only one that leaves the _necessary_ relative clause
(as in this case) without pronouns or other distinction. I'd agree that
is correct, and from a knowledgable point of view, it is desirable to
omit the commas and the "which", but I understand that less skilled
non-native speakers may have difficulties understanding the whole
paragraph.

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Matthias Andree

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