svn commit: r51342 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs

Eitan Adler eadler at FreeBSD.org
Wed Dec 27 11:32:13 UTC 2017


Author: eadler
Date: Wed Dec 27 11:32:11 2017
New Revision: 51342
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/51342

Log:
  Front Page: wordsmith the description a bit
  
  Remove "advanced" which tells the user nothing, and is repeated later.
  Remove "computer" in front of "operating system" which is a given.
  
  "Perfection is achieved, not when there is nothing more to add, but when
  there is nothing left to take away"

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/index.xsl

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/index.xsl
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/index.xsl	Wed Dec 27 11:22:49 2017	(r51341)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/index.xsl	Wed Dec 27 11:32:11 2017	(r51342)
@@ -37,7 +37,7 @@
 			<div id="frontfeaturecontent">
 				<h1>The &os; Project</h1>
 
-				<p>&os; is an advanced computer
+				<p>&os; is an
 				  operating system used to power
 				  modern servers, desktops, and
 				  embedded


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