svn commit: r42844 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs

[Glen Barber]

On Sat, Oct 05, 2013 at 01:38:25AM -0400, Glen Barber wrote:
> On Sat, Oct 05, 2013 at 05:29:45AM +0000, Eitan Adler wrote:
> > Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/about.xml
> > ==============================================================================
> > --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/about.xml	Sat Oct  5 04:50:49 2013	(r42843)
> > +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/about.xml	Sat Oct  5 05:29:45 2013	(r42844)
> > @@ -15,19 +15,15 @@
> >  
> >      		<h2>What is FreeBSD?</h2>
> >  
> > -		      <p>FreeBSD is an advanced operating system for x86
> > -			compatible (including Pentium® and Athlon™),
> > -			amd64, x86-64 and x64
> > -			compatible (including Opteron™, Athlon™64,
> > -			and EM64T), ARM, IA-64, PowerPC, PC-98 and UltraSPARC®
> > -			architectures.  It is derived from BSD, the version of
> > +		      <p>FreeBSD is an operating system for a <a
> > +			href="&base;/platforms/">variety of
> > +			platforms</a> focussing on features, speed, and
> 
>                                       ^^^^^^^^^
> Focusing?
> 

In fact, I'd remove the 'ing' entirely.  "which focuses on[...]".

Glen

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