confusing sentence in hardware notes boilerplate

Benjamin Kaduk bjk at freebsd.org
Mon Dec 24 22:08:11 UTC 2012


I was going over the various release notes documents to do some editing, 
and spent entirely too much time trying to understand a sentence at the 
top of the hardware notes, which has been there since r172098 by bmah in 
2007.  I think that adding a word per below helps the readability, but I 
am no longer an impartial reader (having read the sentence too much).
Thoughts?

-Ben

Index: article.xml
===================================================================
--- article.xml	(revision 244663)
+++ article.xml	(working copy)
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@
      <para>This document contains the hardware compatibility notes for
        &os; &release.current;.  It lists the hardware platforms
        supported by &os;, as well as the various types of hardware
-      devices (storage controllers, network interfaces, and so on),
+      devices supported (storage controllers, network interfaces, and so on),
        along with known working instances of these devices.</para>
    </sect1>



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