Fwd: PERFORCE change 151420 for review

[Rene Ladan]

Hi,

here are some proposed changes to the Updating chapter of the Handbook.

Regards,
Rene

---------- Doorgestuurd bericht ----------
Van: Rene Ladan <rene at freebsd.org>
Datum: 15 oktober 2008 19:07
Onderwerp: PERFORCE change 151420 for review
Aan: Perforce Change Reviews <perforce at freebsd.org>


http://perforce.freebsd.org/chv.cgi?CH=151420

Change 151420 by rene at rene_self on 2008/10/15 17:07:42

       Complete the translation of the Updating chapter (spelling/language).
       Fix some minor nits in the English version.
       Checked build.

Affected files ...

.. //depot/projects/docproj_nl/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/updating/chapter.sgml#2
edit
.. //depot/projects/docproj_nl/nl_NL.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/updating/chapter.sgml#6
edit

Differences ...

==== //depot/projects/docproj_nl/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/updating/chapter.sgml#2
(text+ko) ====

@@ -408,7 +408,7 @@
 &prompt.root; <userinput>rm /var/db/pkg/pkgdb.db
/usr/ports/INDEX-*.db</userinput>
 &prompt.root; <userinput>portupgrade -af</userinput></screen>

-      <para>This has completed, finish the upgrade process with a
+      <para>Once this has completed, finish the upgrade process with a
       final call to <command>freebsd-update</command>.  Issue the
       following command to tie up all loose ends in the upgrade
       process:</para>
@@ -440,14 +440,14 @@
         <varname>kern.securelevel</varname> setting and storing the
         <command>freebsd-update</command> data on a read only file
         system when not in use, a better solution would be to
-         compare the system against a secure disk.  Such as a
+         compare the system against a secure disk, such as a
         <acronym>DVD</acronym> or securely stored external
         <acronym>USB</acronym> disk device.</para>
      </warning>

      <para>The system will now be inspected, and a list of files
-       along with their &man.sha256.1; hash values, both known values
-       in the release and the current installed value.  This is why
+       along with their &man.sha256.1; hash values, both the known value
+       in the release and the current installed value, will be
printed.  This is why
       the output has been sent to the
       <filename>outfile.ids</filename> file.  It scrolls by too
       quickly for eye comparisons, and soon it fills up the console
@@ -458,7 +458,7 @@
       all files different from those in the release, issue the
       following command:</para>

-      <screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>cat update.ids | awk '{ print
$1 }' | more</userinput>
+      <screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>cat outfile.ids | awk '{ print
$1 }' | more</userinput>
 /etc/master.passwd
 /etc/motd
 /etc/passwd
@@ -485,7 +485,7 @@
    <para>The base system of &os; includes a utility for updating
      the Ports Collection too: the &man.portsnap.8; utility.  Upon
      execution, it will connect to a remote site, verify the secure
-      key, and download a new copy of the ports collection.  The key
+      key, and download a new copy of the Ports Collection.  The key
      is used to verify the integrity of all downloaded files, ensuring
      they have not been modified in-flight.  To download the latest
      Ports Collection files, issue the following command:</para>

[... cut Dutch version ...]

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