docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook.
    Gary W. Swearingen 
    garys at opusnet.com
       
    Sat Aug 27 19:25:50 UTC 2005
    
    
  
Julien Gabel <jpeg at thilelli.net> writes:
>    <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
> -    created disk stripe.</para>
> +    created disk stripe:</para>
It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
redundant in sentences that ends with ":".
In decreasing order of verbosity:
The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
disk stripe.
This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".
    
    
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