docs/66770: [patch] share/man/man4/ng_pppoe.4 tyops, grammar, and mdoc(7) vigilantism.

Michel Lavondès fox at vader.aacc.cc.md.us
Mon May 17 17:50:13 UTC 2004


>Number:         66770
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [patch] share/man/man4/ng_pppoe.4 tyops, grammar, and mdoc(7) vigilantism.
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          open
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Mon May 17 10:50:10 PDT 2004
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator:     Michel Lavondès
>Release:        4.8-RELEASE-p13
>Organization:
Ecdysiasts United For Overdressing
>Environment:
>Description:
Patch says it all, really
>How-To-Repeat:
man 4 ng_pppoe

on -current
>Fix:
Also at http://www.livejournal.com/users/pauamma/3175.html

--- share/man/man4/ng_pppoe.4.orig	Sat May  8 10:57:52 2004
+++ share/man/man4/ng_pppoe.4	Sat May  8 11:44:39 2004
@@ -51,7 +51,8 @@
 It is used in conjunction with the
 .Xr netgraph 4
 extensions to the Ethernet framework to divert and inject Ethernet packets
-to and from a PPP agent (which is not specified).
+to and from a PPP agent
+.Pq which is not specified .
 .Pp
 The
 .Dv NGM_PPPOE_GET_STATUS
@@ -88,25 +89,25 @@
 };
 .Ed
 .It Dv NGM_TEXT_STATUS
-This generic message returns is a human-readable version of the node status.
-(not yet)
+This generic message returns a human-readable version of the node status.
+.Pq not yet
 .It Dv NGM_PPPOE_CONNECT
-Tell a nominated newly created hook that it's session should enter
-the state machine in a manner to become a client.
+Tell a nominated newly created hook that its session should enter
+the state machine as a client.
 It must be newly created and
 a service name can be given as an argument.
-It is legal to specify a zero length service name.
+It is legal to specify a zero-length service name.
 This is common on some DSL setups.
 A session request packet will be broadcast on the Ethernet.
 This command uses the
 .Dv ngpppoe_init_data
 structure shown below.
 .It Dv NGM_PPPOE_LISTEN
-Tell a nominated newly created hook that it's session should enter
-the state machine in a manner to become a server listener.
+Tell a nominated newly created hook that its session should enter
+the state machine as a server listener.
 The argument
-given is the name of the service to listen on behalf of
-a zero length service length will match all requests for service.
+given is the name of the service to listen for.
+A zero-length service length will match all requests for service.
 A matching service request
 packet will be passed unmodified back to the process responsible
 for starting the service.
@@ -116,14 +117,15 @@
 .Dv ngpppoe_init_data
 structure shown below.
 .It Dv NGM_PPPOE_OFFER
-Tell a nominated newly created hook that it's session should enter
-the state machine in a manner to become a server.
+Tell a nominated newly created hook that its session should enter
+the state machine as a server.
 The argument given is the name of the service to offer.
-A zero length service
+A zero-length service
 is legal.
 The State machine will progress to a state where it will await
-a request packet to be forwarded to it from  the startup server,
-which in turn probably received it from a LISTEN mode hook ( see above).
+a request packet to be forwarded to it from the startup server,
+which in turn probably received it from a LISTEN mode hook
+.Pq see above .
 This is so
 that information that is required for the session that is embedded in
 the original session request packet, is made available to the state machine
@@ -148,14 +150,15 @@
 This message reports successful Session negotiation.
 It uses the structure shown below, and
 reports back the hook name corresponding to the successful session.
-.It Dv NGM_NGM_PPPOE_FAIL
+.It Dv NGM_PPPOE_FAIL
 This command is sent to the node that started this session with one of the
 above messages, and reports a state change.
 This message reports failed Session negotiation.
 It uses the structure shown below, and
 reports back the hook name corresponding to the failed session.
-The hook will probably have been removed immediately after sending this message
-.It Dv NGM_NGM_PPPOE_CLOSE
+The hook will probably have been removed immediately after sending this
+message.
+.It Dv NGM_PPPOE_CLOSE
 This command is sent to the node that started this session with one of the
 above messages, and reports a state change.
 This message reports a request to close a session.
@@ -163,7 +166,9 @@
 reports back the hook name corresponding to the closed session.
 The hook will probably have been removed immediately after sending this
 message.
-At present this message is not yet used and a 'failed' message
+At present this message is not yet used and a
+.Dv NGM_PPPOE_FAIL
+message
 will be received at closure instead.
 .It Dv NGM_PPPOE_ACNAME
 This command is sent to the node that started this session with one of the
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