[src] cvs commit: src/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/relnotes/common new.sgml

[Bruce A. Mah]

If memory serves me right, Daniel Gerzo wrote:
> Hello Bruce,
> 
> Thursday, August 31, 2006, 4:54:06 PM, you wrote:
> 
>> bmah        2006-08-31 14:53:57 UTC
> 
>>   FreeBSD src repository
> 
>>   Modified files:        (Branch: RELENG_5)
>>     release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/relnotes/common new.sgml 
> 
>> +    <para><application>netcat</application> has been updated from the
>> +      version in a 4 February 2005 OpenBSD snapshot to the version
>> +      included in OpenBSD 3.9.</para>
>> +
> 
> Maybe it should be better to write it like:
> 
> netcat has been updated from the version included in OpenBSD snapshot
> as of February 4th 2005 to the version included in OpenBSD 3.9. ?

Hey Daniel--

I think that what I wrote is grammatically correct, in that "4 February
2005" modifies "OpenBSD snapshot".  I don't have any objections if you
want to change it, although in your text you should probably do s/in
OpenBSD snapshot/in an OpenBSD snapshot/.  Also I personally don't write
dates as "February 4th 2005" but I'm probably not the right person to
wave the consistency banner either.  :-)

I'll think about it some more when I'm next in the file (if you haven't
already changed it, that is).  (This text now exists on HEAD, RELENG_6,
and RELENG_5.)

Thanks!

Bruce.

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