Re: svn commit: r42257 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer

From: Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk_at_MIT.EDU>
Date: Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:47 -0400 (EDT)
On Fri, 12 Jul 2013, Warren Block wrote:

> Author: wblock
> Date: Fri Jul 12 03:21:55 2013
> New Revision: 42257
> URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/42257
>
> Log:
>  Edit for clarity and style.  Try to persuade the hippo and the pogo stick
>  that they are not good for each other.
>
> Modified:
>  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml
>
> Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml
> ==============================================================================
> --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml	Fri Jul 12 02:59:50 2013	(r42256)
> +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml	Fri Jul 12 03:21:55 2013	(r42257)
> _at__at_ -100,42 +100,40 _at__at_
> -    <para>Obviously, if you are going to use markup you need to define
> -      what your markup means, and how it should be interpreted.  You
> -      will need a markup language that you can follow when marking up
> -      your documents.</para>
> +    <para>Markup languages define what
> +      what the markup means and how it should be interpreted.</para>

What what?!

> _at__at_ -680,48 +665,45 _at__at_ example.xml:5: element head: validity er
> -	<para>Look at the contents of
> +	<para>Examine the contents of
> 	  <filename>/usr/local/share/xml/dtd/xhtml/catalog.xml</filename>.
> -	  This is the catalog file for the XHTML DTDs that will have
> -	  been installed as part of the <filename
> +	  This is the catalog file for the <acronym>XHTML</acronym> <acronym>DTD</acronym>s that was

s/was/were/

-Ben

> +	  installed as part of the <filename
> 	    role="package">textproc/docproj</filename> port.</para>
>       </sect3>
>
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