git: 0abcf06951 - main - Status/2023Q3/desktop-convenience.adoc: Fixes

The branch main has been updated by salvadore:

URL: https://cgit.FreeBSD.org/doc/commit/?id=0abcf06951761ef50c5009eb11024efebfe83715

commit 0abcf06951761ef50c5009eb11024efebfe83715
Author:     Graham Perrin <grahamperrin@gmail.com>
AuthorDate: 2023-09-28 10:30:49 +0000
Commit:     Lorenzo Salvadore <salvadore@FreeBSD.org>
CommitDate: 2023-09-28 10:35:07 +0000

    Status/2023Q3/desktop-convenience.adoc: Fixes
    
    Reviewed by:    Mina Galić <freebsd@igalic.co>
    Approved by:    jwb (report author)
    Pull Request:   https://github.com/freebsd/freebsd-doc/pull/256
---
 .../status/report-2023-07-2023-09/desktop-convenience.adoc   | 12 ++++++------
 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)

diff --git a/website/content/en/status/report-2023-07-2023-09/desktop-convenience.adoc b/website/content/en/status/report-2023-07-2023-09/desktop-convenience.adoc
index 305a75d13b..f20a86311e 100644
--- a/website/content/en/status/report-2023-07-2023-09/desktop-convenience.adoc
+++ b/website/content/en/status/report-2023-07-2023-09/desktop-convenience.adoc
@@ -9,17 +9,17 @@ link:https://github.com/outpaddling/freebsd-update-notify[Popup notification for
 Contact: Jason Bacon <jwb@FreeBSD.org>
 
 The package:sysutils/desktop-installer[] port, available for over a decade now, quickly configures a bare FreeBSD system with any desktop environment or window manager.
-However, the FreeBSD base and ports collection has been missing some common features that end users have come to expect from a desktop OS.
+However, the FreeBSD base and ports collection has been missing some common features that end users expect from a desktop OS.
 
 The desktop-installer battery monitor script has been enhanced to display popup notifications at various levels of charge/discharge.
 
-The new port, package:deskutils/qmediamanager[], in conjunction with package:sysutils/devd-mount[] and package:sysutils/npmount[], mounts inserted media upon notification from devd, and displays a popup window offering the user options to show filesystem information, open a file manager, reformat, copy a disk image to the device, or unmount.
+package:deskutils/qmediamanager[], in conjunction with package:sysutils/devd-mount[] and package:sysutils/npmount[], mounts inserted media upon notification from devd, and displays a popup window offering the user options to show filesystem information, open a file manager, reformat, copy a disk image to the device, or unmount.
 It provides a convenient and secure way to work with external media such as USB sticks.
 
-The package:sysutils/freebsd-update-notify[] port displays a popup when new base updates are available, or when a configurable time limit has elapsed.
-If the user chooses to proceed with updates, the entire system is updated (packages, ports, and base) with auto-update-system (part of package:sysutils/auto-admin[]).
+A fourth new port -- package:deskutils/freebsd-update-notify[] -- displays a popup when new base updates are available, or when a configurable time limit has elapsed.
+If the user chooses to proceed with updates, the entire system is updated (packages, ports, and base) with man:auto-update-system[1] (a feature of package:sysutils/auto-admin[]).
 
 These new tools bring the FreeBSD desktop experience a step closer to the convenience of the most popular desktop operating systems.
 
-These tools are effectively prototypes, stable and reliable, but in need of review.
-Feedback from users regarding default behavior and configuration options would be appreciated.
+The tools are effectively prototypes, stable and reliable, but in need of review.
+Feedback from users regarding default behavior and configuration options will be appreciated.