svn commit: r43023 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers
Ed Maste
emaste at FreeBSD.org
Tue Oct 22 20:37:07 UTC 2013
Author: emaste (src committer)
Date: Tue Oct 22 20:37:06 2013
New Revision: 43023
URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/43023
Log:
Add missing articles ("the" and "a") in the iSCSI chapter.
Modified:
head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml
Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml Tue Oct 22 19:39:03 2013 (r43022)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml Tue Oct 22 20:37:06 2013 (r43023)
@@ -5841,7 +5841,7 @@ Logging to FILE /var/log/messages</scree
<title>iSCSI Target</title>
<para>Note: the native iSCSI target is supported starting with
- &os; 10.0-RELEASE. To use iSCSI in older versions, use
+ &os; 10.0-RELEASE. To use iSCSI in older versions, use a
userspace target installed from ports, such as istgt. This
chapter only applies to the native target.</para>
@@ -5886,15 +5886,15 @@ target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 {
authentication. Following two lines make <ulink
url="http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=ctld&sektion=8&manpath=FreeBSD+10-current">ctld(8)</ulink>
listen on all IPv4 ("listen 0.0.0.0") and IPv6 ("listen
- [::]") addresses configured on network interfaces, on
+ [::]") addresses configured on network interfaces, on the
default port (3560). One does not always need to define
a new portal group - there is a default one, called
- "default". Difference between "default" and "pg0" above is
+ "default". The difference between "default" and "pg0" above is
that with the former, the iSCSI SendTargets discovery is
always denied, while in the latter it is always
allowed.</para>
- <para>Second entry defines a single target. Target has two
+ <para>The second entry defines a single target. Target has two
meanings - it is a machine serving iSCSI, but it's also
a named group of LUNs. In this example, we use the latter
meaning. The "iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0" is the
@@ -5905,21 +5905,21 @@ target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 {
"target0" can be pretty much whatever. There can be any
number of targets defined in the config file.</para>
- <para>First line in the target configuration ("auth-group
+ <para>The first line in the target configuration ("auth-group
no-authentication") allows every initiator to connect to it.
- Second line ("portal-group pg0") makes the target reachable
+ The second line ("portal-group pg0") makes the target reachable
through the "pg0" portal group.</para>
<para>After that come LUNs. To the initiator, each LUN will
be visible as a separate disk device - e.g.
<filename>/dev/da0</filename>, <filename>/dev/da1</filename>
etc. There may be multiple LUNs defined for each target.
- LUNs are identified by numbers; LUN 0 is mandatory. First
- line of LUN configuration ("path /data/target0-0") defines
+ LUNs are identified by numbers; LUN 0 is mandatory. The first
+ line of LUN configuration ("path /data/target0-0") defines the
full path to a file or ZVOL backing the LUN. The file must
exist before starting <ulink
url="http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=ctld&sektion=8&manpath=FreeBSD+10-current">ctld(8)</ulink>.
- Second line is optional and specifies the size.</para>
+ The second line is optional and specifies the size.</para>
<para>To make sure <ulink
url="http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=ctld&sektion=8&manpath=FreeBSD+10-current">ctld(8)</ulink>
@@ -5976,15 +5976,15 @@ target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 {
}</programlisting>
<para>The auth-group section defines username/password pairs.
- Initiator trying to connect to
+ An initiator trying to connect to
iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 must specify either of
those. The SendTargets discovery is still permitted without
any kind of authentication; to change it, set
"discovery-auth-group" to something else.</para>
- <para>Common case for iSCSI is to have a single exported
+ <para>A common case for iSCSI is to have a single exported
target for every initiator. As a shorthand for syntax
- above, one can specify username and password directly in the
+ above, one can specify the username and password directly in the
target entry, like this:</para>
<programlisting>target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 {
@@ -6004,7 +6004,7 @@ target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 {
<note>
<para>The current iSCSI initiator is supported starting with
- &os; 10.0-RELEASE. To use iSCSI initiator available in
+ &os; 10.0-RELEASE. To use the iSCSI initiator available in
older versions, refer to <ulink
url="http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/man.cgi?query=iscontrol&sektion=8&manpath=FreeBSD+10-current">iscontrol(8)</ulink>.
This chapter only applies to the new
@@ -6065,7 +6065,7 @@ iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0
<programlisting>Target name Target addr State
iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 10.10.10.10 Waiting for iscsid(8)</programlisting>
- <para>The following suggests network-level problem, such as
+ <para>The following suggests a network-level problem, such as a
wrong <acronym>IP</acronym> address or port:</para>
<programlisting>Target name Target addr State
@@ -6083,7 +6083,7 @@ iqn.2012-06.com.example:atrget0
<programlisting>Target name Target addr State
iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 10.10.10.10 Authentication failed</programlisting>
- <para>To specify CHAP username and secret, use the following
+ <para>To specify a CHAP username and secret, use the following
syntax:</para>
<screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>iscsictl -A -h 10.10.10.10 -t iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 -u user -s secretsecret</userinput></screen>
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