www/82935: Update and fix english in FreeBSD on Laptops article

[Giorgos Keramidas]

The following reply was made to PR www/82935; it has been noted by GNATS.

From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida at freebsd.org>
To: Daniel Gerzo <danger at rulez.sk>
Cc: FreeBSD-gnats-submit at freebsd.org
Subject: Re: www/82935: Update and fix english in FreeBSD on Laptops article
Date: Mon, 4 Jul 2005 01:30:02 +0300

 On 2005-07-03 19:09, Daniel Gerzo <danger at rulez.sk> wrote:
 > --- article.sgml.diff begins here ---
 > --- article.sgml.orig	Sun Jul  3 16:59:50 2005
 > +++ article.sgml	Sun Jul  3 18:58:39 2005
 > @@ -45,8 +45,11 @@
 >        <ulink url="http://gerda.univie.ac.at/freebsd-laptops/">The &os;
 >        Laptop Compatibility List</ulink>.</para>
 >  
 > -    <para>For communications with other &os; laptop users, check out
 > -      the &a.mobile.name; list.</para>
 > +    <para>If you want to communicate with other &os; laptop users,
 > +      checkout the &a.mobile.name; list.  You can also get additional
 > +      information about using Laptops on &os; at
 > +      <ulink url="http://tuxmobil.org/mobile_bsd.html">
 > +	http://tuxmobil.org/mobile_bsd.html</ulink>.</para>
 
 Nice diff.  I only have a minor comment.  When the content of a <ulink>
 element is just the URL itself, it's probably better to leave the
 content of the element empty -- the stylesheets will take care of
 duplicating the URL in the generated link, i.e.:
 
 	<ulink url="http://example.net/"></ulink>
 
 This doesn't duplicate the URL, making it double the effort to switch to
 a different URL and twice as error-prone (i.e. update one but forget the
 other).
 
 If this looks ok to the rest of the -www people, I can commit it with
 this minor change to the diff :-)
 
 - Giorgos