newbies page (ppp)

Ryusuke SUZUKI ryusuke at FreeBSD.org
Fri Dec 10 16:18:42 UTC 2010


ryusuke>  How about the following patch?
ryusuke>
ryusuke> diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml

ryusuke> snip...

ryusuke> +      <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp.
ryusuke> +	  You might start with at least those parts of the

glen> I think with this rewording, "at least" can be removed.

  Thanks. "at leaset" is removed and clarify "those parts" as following,

diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml
--- newbies.sgml	9 Aug 2009 12:58:45 -0000	1.58
+++ newbies.sgml	9 Dec 2010 15:29:53 -0000
@@ -70,11 +70,10 @@
           beginners.  You do not have to know much about anything to enjoy
           this one.</p></li>

-      <li><p>The first thing many people need to set up is ppp, and there is
-          a lot of documentation to help. You might start with at least those
-          parts of the
-          <a href="&url.books;/handbook/index.html">Handbook</a>
-          that are relevant to your needs, and explore the
+      <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp.
+	  You might start with the <a
+	    href="&url.books;/handbook/ppp-and-slip.html">PPP and SLIP</a>
+	  chapter of the FreeBSD Handbook that are relevant to your needs, and explore the
           <a href="http://www.awfulhak.org/ppp.html">ppp page</a>
           for links to the other valuable information and the latest updates.</p></li>

Regards,
  Ryusuke
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