[patch] update for console-server article
murray at FreeBSD.org
Sun Aug 1 07:05:30 UTC 2004
On Sat, Jul 31, 2004 at 04:21:49PM +0400, Dmitry Morozovsky wrote:
> I was working on translating console-server article for FreeBSD Russian
> Documentation Project and found that many parts of it are a bit stale.
Thanks. I committed your patch with minor changes. I will explain
some of the changes I made below.
> <para>This document describes how you can use &os;, hardware and
> - software that runs on &os; to set up a <quote>console server</quote>;
> + software that runs on &os; to set up a <quote>console server</quote>:
This sentence is still awkward, so I just reworded it and broke it into
> + <para>&os; has adequate support for modern Stallion cards since 4.4 release.
> + If you are running &os; 4 from prior to this release, you will need
I simplified this to something like 'If you are using an older version
> - being used. Download the port framework from <ulink
> - URL="conserver-port.tar.gz">here</ulink>, unpack it to create a
> - directory called <filename>conserver-port</filename>. Change into
> - that directory and (as <username>root</username>) type:</para>
> + being used. Use
> + <filename role="package">comms/conserver-com</filename> port.
The article 'the' should be before the package name here. I reworded
this a bit.
> + recommend you to use this version as much more appropriate for
^^^^ added 'it is' here.
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